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same
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this
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other
many
benefits that they give to us. Correct article usage
the many
Firstly
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Therefore
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peole's
lives will be better day by day and society is Correct your spelling
people's
also
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whenever
they want.
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is that they can lose their natural identity. Correct your spelling
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the
more modern life, so they Correct article usage
a
prefer
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prefer to
countries's
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people
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their children. Change preposition
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However
, using a phone is not easy so they have many Linking Words
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in using it.
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products from other nations is not wrong. Correct article usage
apply
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choosing
proper goods for ourselves and society, should not imitate too many modern countries.Change the verb form
choose
be choosing
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