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Nowadays,most of the information is available on the internet, whereas in the past, knowledge was stored in books and on paper. Do you think that advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage

#information #internet #books #paper #situation
With the rapid technological development, taking
informations
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information
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 from the internet
instead
from
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 books became a reality because easier and faster ways are more preferred. I personally believe that the availability of online
information
 will bring far more benefits than the possible drawbacks they have.
To begin
 with the positives of the
information
 available on the internet. For one thing, it is so
east
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easy
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 to take
information
 online
while
,
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 you can know everything you want with
push
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the push
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 of a button and everywhere.
Secondly
, it is the fastest way to collect
information
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people are able to save time and they can find many things they need regardless of the time. On top of that, after
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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 pandemic, many schools changed their program and made it all online.
However
, there are
also
 some negative,
firstly
,
information
 available on the internet can be misleading
due to
 the multiple
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websites, to illustrate, maybe you need
information
 about a specific year and you forget to put the required year, so unfortunately all your job would be wrong, so you need to pay attention carefully.
Furthermore
, it can lead
problems
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whereas
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if you spend extra time using
computer
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such
 as eye problems and so on.
To sum up
, regardless of the many
demerit
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 of online
information
, we
also
 have
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 proof and merit to believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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