The bar chart below shows the results of a survey and shows factors affecting work performance

The chart provided information about outstanding employees based on their performance.

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, there are ten categories of fluctuating ratios between adults and older people.

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with, the chance for personal development division by adults between ages 18-30 significantly rose to 85.

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the data, the second place was the relaxed working environment sub-district, which had 80 people and promotion prospects slightly rose in 79 members. In team spirit, the same number of adults and older people were categorized by 62 teams.

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, citizens aged between 45 and 60, based on the chats above, showed a downtrend in four worker categories.

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, Job security gradually fell in 20 members,

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25% the same position by the relaxed working environment and work environment, the third was chance for personal development and respect from colleagues sharply increase by 45%.

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position was job satisfaction, which surged by two different numbers than before workers.

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The bar chart below shows the results of a survey and shows factors affecting work performance

Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are advantages and disadvantages of a family run business.

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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