The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britian.
The table provides
the
information about different sources where Correct article usage
apply
Police
budget
money
came from in an area of England while
the pie charts illustrates
how the Change the verb form
illustrate
money
spent
on various sector including salaries, technology, building and transport.
Add a missing verb
was spent
Overall
, it is noticable
that most Correct your spelling
noticeable
notable
amount
of money
in Correct article usage
the money
police
Correct article usage
the police
budget
can
from Verb problem
comes
national
government Add an article
the national
whereas
most of the money
used
Add a missing verb
is used
in paying
salaries.
As can be seen from the table Change preposition
to pay
that
national government provided Correct determiner usage
the
huge
Add an article
a huge
amount
of money
in both year
2017 and 2018, which Change to a plural noun
years
is
175. 5 Wrong verb form
was
million
and 177. 8 million
respectively. The second important sources
is the local taxes which supplied 91. 2 Fix the agreement mistake
source
million
in 2017 and 102. 3 million
in 2018 in the total police
budget
. Then
there are others
sources Correct quantifier usage
other
such
as grants also
provide some amount
of money
in the police
budget
, 38 million
and 38. 5 million
in the two years of total money
. In 2018, the total amount
stand
Wrong verb form
stood
with
318. 6 Change preposition
at
million
which is higher than 2017's total.
Most of the money
distributed
as salaries to the offices and staff 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018. The Add a missing verb
was distributed
amount
invested on
building and transport Change preposition
in
cost
has the same percentage in both Fix the agreement mistake
costs
year
which is 17%. Change to a plural noun
years
Technology
required less Add an article
The technology
amount
of money
in both year
2017 and 2018, 8% and 14% respectively.Change to a plural noun
years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, amount, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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