The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britian.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britian.
The table provides
the
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information about different sources where
Police
budget
money
came from in an area of England
while
the pie charts
illustrates
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how the
money
spent
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was spent
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on various sector including salaries, technology, building and transport.
Overall
, it is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
that most
amount
of
money
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the money
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in
police
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the police
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budget
can
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from
national
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government
whereas
most of the
money
used
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in paying
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salaries. As can be seen from the table
that
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national government provided
huge
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amount
of
money
in both
year
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years
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2017 and 2018, which
is
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175. 5
million
and 177. 8
million
respectively. The second important
sources
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source
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is the local taxes which supplied 91. 2
million
in 2017 and 102. 3
million
in 2018 in the total
police
budget
.
Then
there are
others
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sources
such
as grants
also
provide some
amount
of
money
in the
police
budget
, 38
million
and 38. 5
million
in the two years of total
money
. In 2018, the total
amount
stand
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with
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318. 6
million
which is higher than 2017's total. Most of the
money
distributed
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as salaries to the offices and staff 75% in 2017 and 69% in 2018. The
amount
invested
on
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building and transport
cost
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costs
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has the same percentage in both
year
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which is 17%.
Technology
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required less
amount
of
money
in both
year
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years
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2017 and 2018, 8% and 14% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, money, amount, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.

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