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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. to whta extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a contentious subject whether the quality of
people
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's life improves with
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time. Some
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 believe living before the 21st century was greater than the current one. In
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 are in a better situation.
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 idealize the past, rather than pay attention to
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 they have. Because many focus on
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, they do not see how useful technology can be.
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, Artificial Intelligence solutions are able to create the website,
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 a strategy, values and mission of the company based on a short description. Making a new company was never easier than now. If we lived the life from 20 years ago, we would have fewer great entrepreneurs.
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, we have a bigger freedom. I remember my parent's childhood stories in which there was no option to travel abroad. Those who managed to do so did it illegally. Nowadays,
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 can easily drive to any EU country they want without any struggle. We have the option to make international deals and
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, grow our economy. It not only made our century significantly easier
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 but
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 better.
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, I am certain that the positives of living in the current times outweigh the cons.
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 who think the other way round do not notice how many benefits we take from the development of the world.
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, without IT solutions and the ease that we are experiencing currently, we would not be satisfied with reality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quality of life
  • technological innovations
  • life expectancy
  • preventive measures
  • educational opportunities
  • online learning platforms
  • globalization
  • economic conditions
  • social issues
  • gender equality
  • human rights
  • environmental resources
  • climate change
  • leisure activities
  • cultural experiences
  • mental health awareness
  • well-being
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