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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #income
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University
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education
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 is a place where
people
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 can get a higher level of learning.
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,
people
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 think that it should be accessible to anyone regardless of their financial status. I strongly agree that any country should make it free of cost not only because it is stated in the Human
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 Declaration, but
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 to generate more individuals with a higher quality. First of all, it has been universally agreed in
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Rights
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 Declaration that everyone deserves to get educated. Human
rights
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 are something that lies within everyone since they were born. One of the
rights
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 is to have access to
education
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 without any barriers. It
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 has been stipulated in the universal law which means every state should enforce
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 right for their
people
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.
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,
French
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 government had set all kinds of
education
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 for free, including at the
university
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 level.
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,
people
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 from any kind of social status, either from a wealthy family or the poor one have an equal opportunity to prepare themselves to be the future leader of France.
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,
university
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education
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 can generate individuals with a higher quality. Unlike the school which only teaches basic principles in each subject, the
university
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 will foster our comprehension in depth, allowing us to have a broad point of view in our environment. Interestingly, almost 90% of those who earned a professor degree have made a powerful impact
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 social life; Professor Stella Christie, who had made a significant breakthrough in cognitive research in Indonesia. In brief, I believe that in spite of financial status, anyone should be able to enrol in
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-level
education
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Consider adding a counterargument to strengthen your position and address different perspectives.
coherence cohesion
Ensure transitions between sentences and paragraphs are smooth for better coherence.
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The essay begins with a clear and strong thesis statement expressing agreement with the premise.
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Main points are well supported with examples, e.g., the mention of France and Professor Stella Christie.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay, providing a complete response to the task.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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