Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious problems and uses up the world's fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Traveling
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Travelling
through
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by
air
is the easiest way Add an article
the air
for
transportation. Change preposition
of
People
use aeroplains
, private Correct your spelling
aeroplanes
jet
, Fix the agreement mistake
jets
helicopter
etc. Fix the agreement mistake
helicopters
Although
there are some believe that travel
through air
Correct your spelling
airways
ways
bring lot
of problems. They are saying that Change the article
a lot
air
travel
should be restricted due to
this
and uses up the world's fuel resources. I will completely disagree with this
statement
firstly
, if we want to travel
somewhere that is
too far we must completely depend on the aeroplane,
because it goes faster than other transport Remove the comma
apply
ways
or vehicles.There are some situation
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situations
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in that
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
people
feel uncomfortable on air
transport ,some people
will vomit while
travelling in a plane, although
others have some serious problems that cannot cure
using medicine, and these Wrong verb form
be cured
people
can avoid the air
transpot
.Talking about Correct your spelling
transport
transpot
, Correct your spelling
transport
for example
,travelling through
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by
sea
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the sea
in
ships or Change preposition
by
boat
is the worst case Fix the agreement mistake
boats
i
ever come across in my life.
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I
Secondly
, travelling in an aeroplanes
, private Correct the article-noun agreement
an aeroplane
aeroplanes
jet
etc have a complete impact on every Fix the agreement mistake
jets
individuals
life. In my opinion, Change to a genitive case
individual's
i
believe that Change the capitalization
I
people
would not get Suffocation, because people
are relaying
on safe and comfortable Correct your spelling
relying
transpot
, and the one and only Correct your spelling
transport
transpot
that Correct your spelling
transport
gave
Wrong verb form
gives
these quality
is Change the determiner
this quality
these qualities
air
Correct your spelling
airways
ways
. Although
, there are a few having heart problems and some physical problem
they have Fix the agreement mistake
problems
an
opposite impact on Correct article usage
the
this
.Recently, i
had come across a newspaper report about a plain incident.In that newspaper report , one lady with a heart problem was travelling Change the capitalization
I
in
an indigo flight and Change preposition
on
while
in the middle of travel
she felt a pain in Add a comma
travel,
heart
and there Correct pronoun usage
her heart
is
an Wrong verb form
was
air
hostess she gave some first aid that, the passenger has
to survive to the destination. And the amazing part is that the passenger has survived.
In conclusion, all the Wrong verb form
had
transpot
are important in different Correct your spelling
transport
ways
. Mainly travelling
Rephrase
Travelling
through
Change preposition
by
air
have
a major role in Correct subject-verb agreement
has
this
. Diseased or not they have to travel
in plain if they seek safe
and comfortable journey.Correct article usage
a safe
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