There are two-line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the total time of doing housework every weeks in same time.

There are two-line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the total time of doing housework every weeks in same time.
The line charts
shows
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the
comparision
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comparison
of electrical appliances used and the number of hours
working
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worked
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every week from 1920 to 2019. Over the
years
, there
is
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has been
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drastic
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a drastic
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increase in
usage
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the usage
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of electronic
devices
rather than people working at home.
Initially
in 1920, the
usage
of electronic
devices
such
as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaner has
fourty
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forty
four
, zero, and thirty
percent
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respectively.
While
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the
years
increased
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the use of washing
machine
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machines
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is
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has
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lesser compared to the other two machines.
Refrigerator
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The refrigerator
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is the one which has been most used
since
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1940 to 2019 from 52
percent
to 100
percent
in 1980 and it has been constant till 2019. But, Vaccum cleaner has
also
a constant increase from 1920 to 1980 from 30
percent
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per cent
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to 90
percent
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per cent
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and in 2000 the
usage
of
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaners has been to 100
percent
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per cent
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and it is constantly increased as
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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since
then
. The percentage of using electronic
devices
has
been
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increased over the
years
compared to people working in their houses. In 1920, people working at home per week has 50
percent
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per cent
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and as the
years
increased the hours worked per week
has been
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were
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reduced to almost 10
percent
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per cent
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in 2019 and the
usage
of electronic
devices
has risen
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rose
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, usage, devices, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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