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Nowadays it is possible to use computers and mobile phones for automatic language translation, and there is no need for human translator and interpreters. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#computers #phones #language #translation #translator #interpreters
In
contemporary
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 era, Electronic linguistic
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 are attainable to utilise by computerized machines
as well as
 cellphones
instead
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human
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.
However
, I vehemently accede to the assertion
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 technology is
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day
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due to
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This
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To begin
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Due to
 the advancement of technology, It would be convenient for every individual
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to
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 not only
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their work but
also
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mechanical
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. People
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 to
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translate with the help of another person.
Apart from
this
, It has been
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 that Linguistic languages
such
 as
french
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. It is very easy to translate any language by using
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computers. Is there any
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 reason behind it ?
Certainly
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 there is
also
 one reason behind it as it would
also
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 foreign language. If the person had wanted to learn the new language, it would have taken benefits from them. In conclusion, Automobiles
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 becoming very useful
day
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knowledge about any concept .So, it
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 in the future.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and coherent structure. There is confusion in paragraphing, and the use of signposting language is absent, all of which is necessary to guide the reader through the argument. Additionally, the introduction and conclusion are present but they are underdeveloped and do not clearly state the writer's position or summarize the main points effectively.
task achievement
The essay does not fully address the prompt as it fails to discuss the nuances of the argument in relation to the replacement of human translators and interpreters. There is a need for a more complete response to the statement, which would include both sides of the argument and a clear statement of the writer's position. Ideas must be developed more thoroughly, with relevant examples where possible, to achieve a higher score.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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