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the pie chart below shows the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

the pie chart below shows the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.
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pie chart illustrates the comparison of the average household investments in a nation in 1950 and 2010.
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, the major expenditure among all was done in housing in 1950, whilst in 2010, the investment was done in
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 category. Other categories
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 showed some notable changes except education which contributed a minute increase in
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expenditure in 2010.
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 1950, housing occupied nearly more than half of the expenditure,
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followed by food with 11.2%, but in 2010,
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reversed and
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the highest among all categories with 34%,
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followed by housing with 22%. The three categories namely, health care, transportation and others have
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increased their spending to 4.5%, 14% and 19.2%, respectively. The only portion that showed a little change was education
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 decreased with a minor difference of around 0.2%.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • household budget
  • economic development
  • lifestyle changes
  • inflation
  • cost of living
  • disposable income
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • financial priorities
  • consumer behavior
  • allocation of funds
  • fiscal habits
  • longitudinal comparison
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