People who do not use social media networks* will always fall behind in career development opportunities. To what extent do you feel that this is an accurate and important prediction?

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Nowadays
by expanding the Internet, individuals are facing many
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social
media
. Using these facilities has benefits and drawbacks. Social
media
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like easy to use with specific
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to
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decate, the creators try to make
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comprehensive
applications
to overcome every
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of individual needs including entertainment, advertising,
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communication
communications
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.
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, they use
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of
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psychological
surveys to increase
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features of their products. Being familiar with online
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of
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the most important issues in
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attractive feature cause
people
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time on kind of
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begining
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of many mental and physical problems that
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to cope with. These pressures
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from many famous companies.
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hand, companies are using
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networks
to
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introduce
their activities that are
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accessible
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every moment of the day and
on the other hand
, smartphones and
applications
with new attractions are designed to sell more than before. In fact and unfortunately, individuals cannot follow their
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without any force by using mental tricks developers are using. In these
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, following specific social
media
topics became an important activity for
people
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findings
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for new opportunities.
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social networks are
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introduced
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tool by many companies
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cause
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people
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to install them to get
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their news.
To sum up
, knowledge about using social
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skills that
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everybody
must have for developing careers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Networking
  • Professional growth
  • Digital footprint
  • LinkedIn
  • Online presence
  • Industry trends
  • Personal branding
  • Digital literacy
  • Direct applications
  • Privacy concerns
  • Professional image
  • Career trajectory
  • Social media platforms
  • Traditional networking
  • Information accessibility
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