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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Having a residence
instead
 of renting one is considered essential for some individuals in certain countries. In my opinion,
this
 is based on many social, cultural and economic reasons which can impact the society members of a country and as far as I am concerned
this
 is a positive trend
due to
 the reasons which will be discussed below. There are several arguments for many wanting to buy a and live in their own home. One of the reasons is that because of the inflation and housing crisis, the rent has increased significantly.
This
 sometimes becomes unaffordable for common people to continue to pay the rent.
In addition
, it seems to be unfair to them to pay a huge amount of rent to cover someone else’s mortgage.
In contrast
, society members can buy their residence and use the lease money to pay off their own mortgage, resulting in owning an asset that can be passed on to their children. I believe that
this
 is a positive trend.
Firstly
, the amount of money paid fortnightly is more likely affordable than the rental paid by tenants these days. The only catch here is to buy a house
that is
 not overly expensive.
Secondly
, their income is utilised in owning their own asset rather than giving it to someone else,
consequently
, their economic circumstances can be improved .
Finally
, it is a sense of achievement for some people to own a house and pass
this
 asset to their children leading to their sense of satisfaction in their retired life.
Therefore
, the country may have happy and prosperous citizens.
To sum up
,
according to
 what has been discussed in the above paragraphs,I am of the opinion that purchasing a home has its positive aspects to be considered, which is why in many nations, it is vital for many individuals to purchase their own place rather than renting it.
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coherence cohesion
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While the task is addressed reasonably, it would benefit from including more detailed examples to illustrate points fully. Both sides of the argument could be explored more to provide a more in-depth discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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