In some countries, some people are renting accomodation, while other are buying their own homes. Does renting accomodation have more advantages or more disadvantages than buying a place?
There is an ongoing debate regarding the choice of accommodation.
While
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people
prefer to live in rental units, others argue that they should have their own houses. Use synonyms
While
acknowledging the merits of rental properties, Linking Words
this
essay argues that owning a house has more Linking Words
benefits
than the other choice. Use synonyms
This
essay will demonstrate the significant Linking Words
benefits
and the potential drawbacks of renting and my opinion in detail with relevant examples.
On the one hand, the main positives of living in rental properties are a stress-free life and no financial burden. Use synonyms
That is
to say that if Linking Words
people
pay a fixed amount to their homeowner every month for the Use synonyms
property
they are staying in it allows them to lead a happy life without worrying about other expenses Use synonyms
such
as building maintenance, utility bills, and Linking Words
property
tax. Use synonyms
Such
a fixed budget helps Linking Words
people
to manage their financial stability Use synonyms
as well as
prevents them from unpredictable expenses every month. Linking Words
Therefore
, civilians can lead their lives without any stress as a demand in finance is the majority cause of emotional problems. Linking Words
For instance
, it is evident that an average of 40% of Linking Words
people
are not interested in purchasing their own homes because of the fluctuations in interest rates.
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On the other hand
, some disadvantages of Linking Words
such
a trend are the inability to have more control over living space and lack of ownership. Linking Words
In other words
, when citizens continue to live in a lodging accommodation, they will not gain ownership of the place even though they pay an inordinate amount of money as a rental fee. Despite the Linking Words
benefits
of rental budget management, Use synonyms
people
do not get an opportunity to own a place which has more Use synonyms
benefits
in terms of the Use synonyms
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property's
property
monetary value because Change noun form
property's
such
possessions would be worth much more in the future. Linking Words
Moreover
, it is a perfect way to invest money which amplifies the profit Linking Words
according to
the status of current real-estate market trends. Linking Words
For instance
, my relative has evaluated the market value of his house and it was estimated as $500,000, Linking Words
however
, he invested only $300,000 to purchase Linking Words
this
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property
a few years ago.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
although
rental housing has some advantages Linking Words
such
as calculated monthly expenditures and a stress-free life, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the positives because Linking Words
people
fail to make profits by making Use synonyms
proper
financial decision and lives without freedom.Add an article
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coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The essay demonstrates a clear logical structure, with ideas and paragraphs that are organised in a logical manner. However, to achieve a higher score, consider utilising a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect ideas within and across paragraphs. Also, aim to ensure that pronoun referencing is clear throughout your essay to avoid ambiguity.
task achievement
For task achievement: While the essay addresses the prompt, the response sometimes appears to lack a fully developed argument with respect to the advantages and disadvantages of renting vs owning. To improve, ensure that each advantage or disadvantage is explored in depth with clear and explicit explanations that directly relate to the question. Moreover, provide a more balanced discussion when comparing the two options before concluding which one has more weight. Back up your arguments with more specific and varied examples for higher effectiveness.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.