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The Chart shows expected city visits by country of origin for 2018

The Chart shows expected city visits by country of origin for 2018
#city #visits #country #origin
The chart below illustrates city
visit
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visits
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 by foreign tourists from America,
Cannada
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Canada
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 and Mexico during 2018.
Overall
, there was a
difference
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 choice between
three
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the three
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 countries
traveled
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that traveled
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 to 4 cities in
European
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Europe
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. The lowest belonged to
Liverpool
, the opposite was seen in the
Marid
.
Marid
 and Paris were the most favourable destinations,
in
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which
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apply
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,
Marid
 was the highest with 250 total
of
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travelers
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travellers
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. The number of
American
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Americans
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 in
Marid
 and Paris was 100 and 63 respectively, these figures in both
region
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regions
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 were majority.
While
 the second in
Marid
 was Canada at 80, 10 more than Mexico with 70, 62
Mexican
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Mexicans
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 visited Paris was the
second,
followed by Canada at 61, just 2 less than Mexico.
On the other hand
, Roma and
Liverpool
 were less common than popular ones and
Liverpool
 was the least
acttacted
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attached
attracted
attacked
 city with 95 visitors in total, which
only
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is only
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 one-third of the most well
know
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 venue.
Whereas
 the quantity of
American
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Americans
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went
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 to Roma at 80,
this
 figure
had
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was
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 30 more than
Liverpool
.
Similarly
, 50 Candian
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for
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to
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 trip
in
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to
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 Roma doubled than
Liverpool
. Despite the
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number of Mexian
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Mexian
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Mexican
 tourist in
Liverpool
was
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 18, still 2 less than Roma’s figure.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words liverpool, marid with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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