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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write 150 to 170 words.

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write 150 to 170 words.
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The bar chart provides data on the
expenditure
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 on six different consumer goods across four European
countries
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: Germany, Italy, France, and
Britain
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. The goods in question include personal
stereos
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,
tennis
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racquets
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, perfumes, CDs, toys, and photographic film, with spending measured in thousands of pounds sterling. From the chart, it is evident that
Britain
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 shows the highest spending in five out of the six categories, only surpassed by France in the
expenditure
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 on photographic film. Notably,
Britain
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's spending on personal
stereos
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 and CDs is significantly higher than the other three nations, indicating a strong preference for audio-related products. The
expenditure
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 on
tennis
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racquets
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 in
Britain
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 is
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 remarkable, exceeding the 160,000-pound mark, which is substantially higher than the other
countries
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, where the spending remains below 120,000 pounds. France's spending pattern is relatively consistent across all categories, with a particular inclination towards photographic film, where it leads
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 around 160,000 pounds. Italy and Germany show similar spending habits, with Italy spending slightly more on toys and Germany on personal
stereos
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. Perfumes and
tennis
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racquets
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 appear to be less popular consumer goods in all four
countries
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, with expenditures not reaching beyond the 140,000-pound threshold.
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, personal
stereos
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, CDs, and toys are more significant expenses, reflecting their popularity among consumers in these European nations. In summary, the chart illustrates distinct national spending
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, with
Britain
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's
expenditure
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 being the most prominent in most categories, and
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shared modest spending on perfumes and
tennis
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racquets
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 across all featured
countries
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.
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