In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime drama are becoming more and more popular.
why do You think this?
what is Your opinion of crime fiction and crime dramas
issue in most countries. Some people believe that unreal
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. This essay covers agreements and disagreements why must be allocated money for railways more than roads. I agree that expending to railways must be more than roads due to both economic situation and sollution of global problem.
I completely agree with the assertion that people living in the 21st century enjoy a significantly higher quality of life compared to their counterparts in previous centuries. This is evident across various aspects, including basic needs, health, sanitation, safety, as well as the recognition and enhancement of higher human values such as democratic decision-making, culture, and freedom.
It is a common belief that a person should always try to keep everything arranged in a manner while working in the office and one's house. In my opinion, every person should go for this kind of lifestyle in their house as well as workplace. I am going to talk about various aspects related to this habit in upcoming paragraphs.
As the science technology is developed fast in these days, people needs to consider 'What is the most critical purpose of science technology?'. Without understanding and thinking seriously about this problem, scientists can make dangerous and non-ethical technology easily. Globally, public world center such as UN make a guideline for alerting this problem and in the guideline, it specifies the aim of science. And it shows science exists to improve people's lives.