The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams show West

Park

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School

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at three different stages in its development:1950, 1980 and 2010. In 1950, the

school

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was built close to the main road and next to a number of houses. A large area behind the

school

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was turned into a

playground

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while

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the area behind the houses was farmland. By 1980, the houses had been demolished in order to make way for a small car

park

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and an additional

school

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building, which became the science block.

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to the existing

playground

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, the

school

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also

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gained the farmland and converted it into a sports field. In 2010, the

school

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building remained unchanged but the car

park

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was extended to cover the entire sports field.

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this

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, the original

playground

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was divided into two so that it provided a smaller

playground

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and a small sports field. During

this

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period, the

school

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has increased in size and a car

park

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has been created and enlarged. The combined recreational areas,

however

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, first expanded and were

then

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reduced in size.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, playground with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

173 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

renovation
expansion
modernization
infrastructure
landscape
facade
demolition
construction
alteration
amenities
accessibility
sustainability
curriculum
enrollment
pedagogy
architecture
commute
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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

The shortage of housing in big cities can cause severe consequences. Only governments actions can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some think that Interviews are not reliable way for hiring employees. It is important to apply other methods for this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?