Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the less of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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the decrased
decrased
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decreased
significantly
population of special Rephrase
apply
plant
or animals. Fix the agreement mistake
plants
On the other hand
, some people argue that not priority
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a priority
problem
to solve due to
the
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another big issues
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another big issue
other big issues
Such
as climate
change
or a new virus. This
essay will discuss both of
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view
.
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views
Firstly
, the
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environtment
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environmental
problem
can Fix the agreement mistake
problems
cause
by many factors, one of the most vital Wrong verb form
be caused
problem
is losing a significant number of Change to a plural noun
problems
spesific
flora and fauna. The Correct your spelling
specific
food
chain will be broke
as a impact of Wrong verb form
broken
disappear
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the disappearance of
that creatures
. Change the determiner
that creature
those creatures
For example
, the population of snack
declined massively in four Fix the agreement mistake
snacks
decade
and the number of Change to a plural noun
decades
rat
has grown significantly. Change to a plural noun
rats
As a result
, the rat will expansion
rapidly outside Replace the word
expand
to
our houses. If a Change preposition
apply
partucular
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particular
plant
slump
that will be impacted Fix the agreement mistake
slumps
for
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animal
because Fix the agreement mistake
animals
that is
a food
source for them. For instance
, if a
grass Correct article usage
apply
will vanish
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vanishes
then
the Elephant, the Deer or the others lose a
primary Correct article usage
apply
food
. Thus
, In a long time they are
will be died.
Even though, the Unnecessary verb
apply
problem
with less number of flora and fauna are the primary issues. The issue about
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of
climate
change
is the most important. Because climate
change
not only effect
to our Correct your spelling
affect
live
but Replace the word
lives
also
for
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apply
animal
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animals
or
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and
plant
too. Fix the agreement mistake
plants
The
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Climate
climate
change
will rise
the Correct your spelling
raise
world
temparature
, Correct your spelling
temperature
then
in Correct article usage
the long-term
long-term
will make our Correct your spelling
long term
world
hoter
than before. The effect of high temperature can be worts for us, Correct your spelling
hotter
other
hotel
such
as the massive plant
, animal
or Fix the agreement mistake
animals
human
will Fix the agreement mistake
humans
died
because of the Change the verb form
die
hotest
temperature. Change the word
hottest
Moreover
, the peak temperature of world
will impact Correct article usage
the world
drammatically
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dramatically
decreased
our source of Wrong verb form
decrease
food
and water. Thus
, we will be starved and weaked
without Correct your spelling
weak
eat
and Change the verb form
eating
drink
.
In conclusion, the Wrong verb form
drinking
problem
about
a minimal population of Change preposition
of
spesific
flora and fauna Correct your spelling
specific
that
is Correct pronoun usage
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a
important thing for us to solveChange the article
an
it
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Personaly
, Correct your spelling
Personally
i
believe that Change the capitalization
I
the
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apply
climate
change
is priority
to figure out a solution because not only effect to Add an article
a priority
human
but Fix the agreement mistake
humans
also
for
all Change preposition
apply
organism
in the Fix the agreement mistake
organisms
world
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