Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the less of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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have been
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focused to
solve
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by people in our
world
including
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the decrased
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decrased
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decreased
significantly
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population of special
plant
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plants
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or animals.
On the other hand
, some people argue that not
priority
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a priority
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problem
to solve
due to
the
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another big issues
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another big issue
other big issues
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.
Such
as
climate
change
or a new virus.
This
essay will discuss both
of
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view
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views
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.
Firstly
,
the
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environtment
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environmental
problem
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problems
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can
cause
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be caused
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by many factors, one of the most vital
problem
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problems
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is losing a significant number of
spesific
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specific
flora and fauna. The
food
chain will be
broke
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broken
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as a impact of
disappear
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the disappearance of
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that creatures
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that creature
those creatures
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.
For example
, the population of
snack
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snacks
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declined massively in four
decade
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decades
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and the number of
rat
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rats
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has grown significantly.
As a result
, the rat will
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expand
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rapidly outside
to
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apply
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our houses. If a
partucular
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particular
plant
slump
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slumps
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that will be impacted
for
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animal
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animals
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because
that is
a
food
source for them.
For instance
, if
a
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grass
will vanish
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vanishes
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then
the Elephant, the Deer or the others lose
a
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apply
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primary
food
.
Thus
, In a long time they
are
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will be died. Even though, the
problem
with less number of flora and fauna are the primary issues. The issue
about
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of
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climate
change
is the most important. Because
climate
change
not only
effect
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affect
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to our
live
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lives
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but
also
for
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animal
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animals
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or
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and
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plant
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plants
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too.
The
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climate
change
will
rise
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raise
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the
world
temparature
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temperature
,
then
in
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the long-term
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long-term
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long term
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will make our
world
hoter
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hotter
other
hotel
than before. The effect of high temperature can be worts for us,
such
as the massive
plant
,
animal
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animals
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or
human
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humans
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will
died
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die
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because of the
hotest
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hottest
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temperature.
Moreover
, the peak temperature of
world
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the world
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will impact
drammatically
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dramatically
decreased
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decrease
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our source of
food
and water.
Thus
, we will be starved and
weaked
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weak
without
eat
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eating
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and
drink
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drinking
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. In conclusion, the
problem
about
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of
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a minimal population of
spesific
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specific
flora and fauna
that
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apply
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is
a
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an
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important thing for us to solve
it
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apply
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.
Personaly
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Personally
,
i
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I
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believe that
the
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apply
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climate
change
is
priority
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a priority
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to figure out a solution because not only effect to
human
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humans
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but
also
for
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all
organism
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organisms
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in the
world
.
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task achievement
The essay partially addresses the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument. However, it lacks precise details and comprehensive explanation. Specific, relevant examples should be included to strengthen the essay. It's important to use concrete evidence to support claims, which was missing in this response.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical flow of ideas is somewhat disrupted by grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Consider planning the essay with a clear progression of ideas, using cohesive devices effectively and improving paragraph transitions to enhance readability and flow.

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