There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this

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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have
children
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.Which is, started to
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increase
after 2010. People
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lot
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a lot
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of reasons to get like
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decision. In the next few paragraphs will
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discuss about advantages,
disadcantages
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disadvantages
and how to impact
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in the future. After
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2010,
lot
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of married couples decided not to have
a
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children
a child
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children
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due to
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impact
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the impact
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of
inflastion
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inflation
and some social changes. There was
an
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3.2% inflation for the whole world in 2010. It directly hit
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middle class
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families. They
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decided
, how they
can
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feed
for
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their
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childrens
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children
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with that inflation. All the goods prices , school fees, medicines,
transportation
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and transportation
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cost
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costs
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all
gone
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went
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high. People couldn't afford that with their other expenses so, they
desided
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decided
not
having
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to have
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children
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and
living
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lonely. From my side, I reckon
that is
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a good decision
by
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on
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the children
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children
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children's
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side.
Reason
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is,
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that
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reasons like inflation
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childrens
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children
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don't need to
suffering
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suffer
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from any
negetive
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negative
facts. After
the
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2010, some
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was
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increased annonymously after that period, like
covid-19
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COVID-19
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,
influensa
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influenza
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etc. If that
impacted
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to
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their
children
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, people need
huge
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a huge
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amount to recover their
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childrens
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children
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. If parents
desided
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decided
not
having
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babies,
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childrens
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children
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wasn't need
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wasn't needed
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to
suffering
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suffer
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from any
deseas
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diseases
. The
disadvatages
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disadvantages
disadvantage
of
this
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are
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, in the future whole
population
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will
be reduce
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be reduced
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accordingly
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. A body
who
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did a survey in 2015 from South African countries & from some
asian
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Asian
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countries. In that survey
demostrated
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demonstrated
,
18
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% reduction
of
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in
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population
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the population
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considering
with
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2008 statistical data.
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that data, we can assume that rate will
be
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increase up to 25%
withing
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within
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the next few years. China is already started to reduce their
population
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and
india
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is
staring
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starting
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to do that.
However
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that
decesion
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decision
in totally involves to future
population
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and
as
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my view in
the
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2050
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2050,
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that reduction rate
would
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be higher
to
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than
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30%.
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, my opinion is,
every
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that every
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goverments
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governments
government
and medical sector should
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introduce
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a new programs
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a new program
new programs
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to teach about the importance of having a baby. If
that
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those
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programs can
do
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do this
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, we can
decrese
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decrease
the rate of
popuation
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population
descreasement
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decrease
.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a logical flow and clear paragraph structure. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details and examples. Additionally, ideas between sentences and paragraphs need to be better connected using cohesive devices such as linking words and phrases.
task achievement
The essay does not completely address the task, as it does not discuss in depth the advantages and disadvantages of couples deciding not to have children. The introduction should clearly address the topic and the conclusion should summarize the main points. Personal opinion can be included, but the task requires a balanced discussion of both sides.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • childfree
  • personal freedom
  • financial stress
  • raising children
  • nurturing the relationship
  • societal pressure
  • stigma
  • support network
  • companionship
  • legacy
  • regret
  • intimate bond
  • norm
  • invest in experiences
  • close-knit
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