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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.

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The two pie charts show the
overall
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 imports of five types of vegetables in
Qatar
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 and
Oman
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 in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, ginger imports are equal in both countries,
while
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 garlic accounts for the major import of
Oman
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. It
can
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 be that peas are the least imported type of
vegetable
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 in
Qatar
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 with a value of 150,
whereas
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this
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 trend is 400 in
Oman
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.
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, imports of ginger are the same in
Qatar
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 and
Oman
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 at 300
tonnes
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,
similarly
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 the same amount of broccoli is bought from abroad in
Oman
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, but it is the second least imported
vegetable
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 in
Qatar
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 with a figure of 220. Spinach is the most imported green in
Qatar
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, which is 450
tonnes
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 and
this
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 trend shows 600
tonnes
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 being the second most consumed
vegetable
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 from abroad in a second given country. When it comes to
Oman
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, the type of
vegetable
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 brought from abroad the most is garlic with a figure of 800
tonnes
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words qatar, oman, tonnes, vegetable with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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