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Many museums and historic sites are mainly visited by tourists rather than by local residents. What are the causes of this? What can be done for museums and historic sites to attract more local visitors?

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Over the
last
 two or three decades, historical
places
 have been unpopularised more tremendously among the population than ever before.
As a result
, many museums and historic
places
 are explored by tourists as compared to the local
inhabitants
. There are some reasons for
this
 tendency and there are some possible solutions to attract more local residents to
visit
 these
locations
.
This
 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. There are some reasons for the local people do not like to
visit
 the historical
places
. One of the main cause is local population are too busy
in
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 their everyday work
such
 as school, college and work. They do not have more time to explore these kinds of cultural heritage
locations
 as compared to the foreigners, the international visitors have more time on holidays time
while
 they have to
visit
 museums. Another reason is that the local community have more focus on entertainment based on activities like going to
cinema
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the cinema
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, fun park and adventure
places
instead
 of the historical
locations
.
For example
, many Indians like to watch movies in
cinema
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the cinema
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at
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every weekend but they do not like to
visit
there
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their
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 cultural heritage
places
. There are some possible solutions to attract the locals
visit
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to visit
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 museums. One of the
remedy
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 is the local authority should
be conducted
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conduct
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 innumerable presentations, exhibitions and
classroom
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classrooms
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 in these
places
while
 locals might be explored in these venues.
For instance
, in Sri Lanka government encourages
to
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apply
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the local residents to
visit
these area
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this area
these areas
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 by conducting exhibitions
in
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every month,
as a result
, their local
inhabitants
are visited
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visit
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 frequently without
getting
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any
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apply
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boredom. Another remedy is the
authority
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authorities
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 should
be provided
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provide
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free
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a free
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 entry pass to the local
inhabitants
 in order
to
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for
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 more and more people
like
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apply
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to
visit
 there
at
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during
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week end
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the weekend
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 holidays
instead
 of going cinema. These are the ways of attracting to
visit
 the
local
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locals
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 in the historical
places
.
To conclude
, the local populace
are
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is
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 too busy and they like to take more entertainment activities are the main causes
for
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the local
inhabitants
 do not
visit
 the historical
places
 rather than foreigners. Free entrance
ticket
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tickets
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 and
conduct
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conducting
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presentation
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presentations
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,
exhibition
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exhibitions
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 and
seminar
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seminars
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 are the possible solutions to attract
local
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locals
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 will
visit
in
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apply
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these
locations
.
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Task Response
Ensure that the introduction clearly addresses the question without being too general or vague. Present a clear thesis statement outlining the causes and solutions you will discuss.
Task Response
When mentioning causes and solutions, provide more detailed examples that illustrate your points. These should be specific to the question and help clarify your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop paragraphs with a clear central point, and ensure all sentences within the paragraph support this main idea without deviating or introducing unrelated information.
Coherence and Cohesion
Employ a range of cohesive devices accurately and appropriately. For example, instead of repeatedly using 'another reason', use synonyms or refer back to the previous point to maintain cohesion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and range. Avoid repetitive structures and errors which can hinder the clear communication of ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourists
  • historic sites
  • culture
  • heritage
  • taken for granted
  • marketing and promotion
  • advertising
  • entry fees
  • incentives
  • educational programs
  • Local Appreciation Days
  • interactive exhibitions
  • immersive experiences
  • social media campaigns
  • community engagement
  • sense of ownership
  • cultural heritage
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