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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts provide data
of
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on
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Britain
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Britain's
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 police budget for 2017 and 2018. The sources of money
is
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given in the table and
charts
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the charts
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 show how it was spent.
Overall
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, it can be seen that their major field of income was
national
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a national
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 government and local taxes went
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to
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the
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second place.
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, most of the money was allocated to the employee’s salary. What stands out from the table is that the first and the most important source of earnings for the police of Britain was their national government which contained about half of the total. They
earnt
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around 100 million pounds from local taxes and the other ways were ranked bottom. It is obvious that the amount of the budget was increased
14
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 million pounds approximately, from 2017 to 2018. Moving to the pie charts, It can be distinguished that in distributing the budget the greatest trend went to the salary of officers and staff,
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 it experienced a drop
about
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 6% in 2018. The next one was technology
which its
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whose
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 percentage remained unchanged in two years.
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, accommodations included the least proportion but they considered a 6% rise for it in 2018.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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