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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020.
#information #age #population #iceland
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The bar chart illustrates the different
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age
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group
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 of people living in Iceland from 1990 to 2020.
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, the size of the 25-54
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group
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is
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increase
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 the most over the period.
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 the size of the two younger
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group
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 is
decreas
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decrease
decreased
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 a little bit.The number of people in
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the
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group
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 is stayed about the same .
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 three younger
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group
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, the 25-54
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group
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 grew significantly from 30% in 1990 to almost half of the population in 2020.
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 a trend was not seen in the two figures for the youngest
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, children under 14 years old saw an
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 drop of 8%, followed by a 10% decrease in the population of the 15-24
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group
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.
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, people from the
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age
 of 65 and over had almost the same figures as the 55-64
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 one, respectively 12% and 13%. Over 10 years, the two oldest
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 remained unchanged,
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 the number of elderly between the ages of 55 and 64 fell to 10% of the population.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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