The chart shows the percentage of land in four countries that was covered by forest between 1600 and 2000.

The chart shows the percentage of land in four countries that was covered by forest between 1600 and 2000.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of land covered by
forest
in four countries from 1600 to 2000.
Overall
,
while
the US and the
the
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UK experienced a downward trend,
Scotland
and
France
showed an upward trend, with
Scotland
exhibiting the highest progression over 400 years.
To begin
with, between 1600 to 1800,
initially
, the area
that
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covered
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by
forest
in the UK was the highest
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compared to other countries, about 49%. After which, it dwindled gradually
approximately
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at
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36% in 1800.
Similarly
to
France
and England's trend, they witnessed a moderate decrease
about
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15% and 5%, respectively,
while
the covered
forest
in
Scotland
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slightly and surpassed England in 1800, accounting for 6%. In the period of 1850 to 2000, after decreasing considerably around 35%, a small number of covered land
were
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increased and remained unchanged
in
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the end of the period.
However
,
France
and
Scotland
showed a significant
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increase
, with
France
's
were
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being
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the highest change.
In contrast
,
England
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forest
expansion remained unchanged
at
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the range of 5% to 10%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words forest, scotland, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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