The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the reproduction and growth of the
salmon
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.
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, the development of the
salmon
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cyclical
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and has several stages from egg incubation to the adult fish. As can be seen from the diagram, salmons start their life in the river to produce eggs. The fertile eggs
subsequently
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experience an incubation before they hatch to be
a
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baby
salmon
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. The baby
salmon
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remains in the river and after
reach
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certain
ages
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age
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they will do
a
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apply
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
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rearing.
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salmon
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reach
certain
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a certain
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size, they will migrate to the estuary area which is the concoction of fresh
water
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and salt
water
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to adapt
with
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the habitat before they are ready to rear in the open sea. As regards
to
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the
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ocean life, the migration starts when they have reached
certain
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length. In the ocean,
salmon
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will encounter
the
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growth and maturation before they are ready for
matting
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the matting
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process. Adult
salmon
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is moving to
fresh
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freshwater
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water
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area
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areas
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in order to match with other male/female adult salmons. In the river they will do a spawning process to produce
egss
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eggs
and the whole process
begin
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begins
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again.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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