Nowadays, a lot of people are able to do their work from home. Discuss both the advantage and disadvantages of this develpment.
Working from home is now considered possible for numerous commoners.
This
trend provides advantages for some of the workers, in the meantime, disadvantages for some too, depending on their personal situation.
On the one hand, WFH can be very helpful for those who have a number of responsibilities at their own places like single parents. Some of them really need to raise their children or toddlers in their own places. This
not only helps them save money from hiring a nanny but also
can earn more income. For example
, according to
the Japan Times Weekly, 60% of Japanese single moms have to pay more than 70,000 Yen a year for daycare toddlers or babysitting. Additionally
, not mentioned that not needing to commute to the office can save an amount of money , one's personal space can still be a safe zone they can be more productive compared to the office and the results of their work can turn considerably acceptable as well as
reflect their productivity.
On the other hand
, being at their accommodation all the time can, nevertheless
, become a problem for families, some of whom live with their parents, in particular
. Such
as the boomer generation who may misunderstand their offspring who are doing their work from their accommodation are jobless. Moreover
, another issue of the trend is time management. Certain home-working employees can’t balance working hours and relaxation moments, worse, they can’t even sleep when having to be kept settled in the same place. For instance
, a study from California University said 70% of home workers during COVID-19 times had messed up their lives because they couldn’t balance between working hours and their personal activities.
To conclude
, working from their own place can be good for single parents and those with more productivity at their house, but in the meantime, can be disadvantageous for those living with senior family members.Submitted by amittawin on
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