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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram indicates the residents in various nations, including Africa; America; Asia and the Pacific; Europe; and
Middle
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 East, who went on international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000,
2005
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and 2005
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 respectively.
Overall
, the popularity of overseas travelling indicated an upward trend, the majority of them were from Europe, compared to those from
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the Middle
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 East took up only a small proportion. On top of that, the
numbe
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number
 in Asia and the Pacific underwent the most drastic surge during
surveyed
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the surveyed
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 period. The number of individuals who went
aboard
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abroad
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gone
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went
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 up from 449 to 694
million
 between 1990 and 2005, in which
European
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Europe
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 accounted for the largest part, its number went up from 280 to 400
million
.
On the other hand
, the population
of
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travelling
internaionally
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internationally
 in Asia and the Pacific
rised
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risen
 more than two times since 1990 at 60
million
, to 2005 at 136
million
. The population of
internaiontal
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international
 tourists in
Middle
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the Middle
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 East and Africa, despite
that
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that,
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 underwent
a
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apply
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consistant
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consistent
constant
 growth, people from these two regions took up the least proportion among all overseas tourists in surveyed nations. The former
grown
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grew
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 10
million
 over 15
yeears
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years
at
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to
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 29
million
 in 2005,
the
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and the
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 latter went up from 10
million
 to 16
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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