The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day.

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This

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These

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maps illustrate changes in the art

gallery

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's first floor in 2015 and

present

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the present

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day.

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the maps, the changes are not

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dramatic as they could be, they just removed

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the

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gallery

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office, cafe and shop and the fourth

excibition

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exhibition

room and

add

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added

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some new stuff. These maps provide strong evidence, that

ramp

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a ramp

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for wheelchairs at the entrance

have

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been introduced.

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near to the stairs, which

are leading

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lead

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to the next

floor

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floor,

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you can find the lift for

handicappeds

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handicapped

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and kids, which weren't there in 2015. 3

exibitions

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exhibitions

rooms and the receptionist haven't been replaced or removed. Meanwhile, the

excibition

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exhibition

room 4 was divided into 2 areas: children's area and temporary

excebition

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exhibition

exhibitions

. They demolished the

gallery

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office and

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its place constructed 3 vending machines.

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instead

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cafe

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a cafe

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and

shop

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shop,

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there is

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gallery

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a gallery

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shop.

Area

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The area

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where

stairs

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the stairs

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are located was expanded by putting

receptionist

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the receptionist

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closer to the entrance.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

152 words

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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day.

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