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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day.

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2015 and present day.
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This
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These
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 maps illustrate changes in the art
gallery
's first floor in 2015 and
present
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the present
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 day.
According to
 the maps, the changes are not
so
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as
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 dramatic as they could be, they just removed
Correct article usage
the
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gallery
 office, cafe and shop and the fourth
excibition
Correct your spelling
exhibition
 room and
add
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added
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 some new stuff. These maps provide strong evidence, that
ramp
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a ramp
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 for wheelchairs at the entrance
have
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has
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 been introduced.
Also
 near to the stairs, which
are leading
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lead
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 to the next
floor
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floor,
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 you can find the lift for
handicappeds
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handicapped
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 and kids, which weren't there in 2015. 3
exibitions
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exhibitions
 rooms and the receptionist haven't been replaced or removed. Meanwhile, the
excibition
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exhibition
 room 4 was divided into 2 areas: children's area and temporary
excebition
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exhibition
exhibitions
. They demolished the
gallery
 office and
on
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in
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 its place constructed 3 vending machines.
In addition
,
instead
 of
cafe
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a cafe
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 and
shop
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shop,
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 there is
gallery
Correct article usage
a gallery
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 shop.
Area
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The area
An area
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 where
stairs
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the stairs
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 are located was expanded by putting
receptionist
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the receptionist
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 closer to the entrance.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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