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Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush. What are the reasons for this? Is the decline in writing by hand a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
this
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 era of rapidly developing information
technology
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. the number of people writing by
hand
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 using traditional tools
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 as pens and pencils is decreasing.
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 essay will explore the reasons behind
this
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 decline and argue that, despite some great benefits, there are
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 negative consequences of
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 change. The
development
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 of technological devices
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 as computers, tablets and
smartphone
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 provides more convenient and effective means of writing and communication. In educational and professional settings, typed text has become the standard
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 its readability and ease of distribution. Writing by
hand
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 makes
easier
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 to make mistakes and takes more time. The
development
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 of science and
technology
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 will help save time and check for errors. Because of these benefits and disadvantages, writing by
hand
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 has led to its decline and replacement by
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On the other
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hand
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, reducing handwriting has negative consequences. Over-reliance on
technology
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 can lead to challenges in situations where digital devices are not accessible, leaving individuals ill-equipped to write manually, the reduced practice of handwriting has raised concerns regarding its potential impact on cognitive
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.
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, Handwriting is important for brain
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, especially in children. Handwriting
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 has emotional value, something that digital text cannot match. In short, the decreasing use of handwriting is a result of technological advances and the need for efficiency in modern lifestyles.
While
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 digitization offers convenience and accessibility, it may compromise certain cognitive benefits associated with handwriting.
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coherence cohesion
The essay moderately adheres to the logical structure with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, ensure smoother transitions and cohesive devices to connect the ideas and arguments more seamlessly across paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The main points are somewhat supported, but the essay would benefit from more detailed examples and a deeper exploration of the ideas presented to reinforce the arguments effectively. Aim for well-elaborated points that showcase comprehensive understanding.
task achievement
You addressed the task and presented a balanced view on the topic. Nonetheless, the reasons behind the decline in handwriting and implications of such decline could be further explored with specific details to strengthen the response. Introduce varied and precise examples to illustrate your points.
task achievement
Your ideas are relatively clear and coherent, but consider developing each point fully before moving to the next. This will improve clarity and ensure a comprehensive discussion of the task. Expand on ideas to form solid, argumentative constructs.

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