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Most people prefer ready to eat food outside of their homes rather than home made food now.Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages.

#people #food #homes #home
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Nowdays
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Nowadays
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 individuals prefer to eat
food
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in
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apply
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outside
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the outside
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home
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 of their homes rather
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then
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than
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home made
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homemade
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food
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 now.
Overall
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,
this
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 essay will provide the information about
prons
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pros
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 and cons which relate
with
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to
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this
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 topic in
this
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paragraphs
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paragraph
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.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 the individuals who spend money
for
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apply
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buying
for in
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outside
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an outside
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home
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homes
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, there are several benefits.
Fistly
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Firstly
, it will be efficient for
people
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 who
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dont
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do not
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 have much
time
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 for cooking,
which
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apply
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they will order or take away
food
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 from
restaurant
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the restaurant
a restaurant
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.
Next,
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people
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 can choose what they want to eat
base
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based
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for
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on
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 the flavour.
For instance
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,
in
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kompas news found that the
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people
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number of people
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 in big cities
spent
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who spent
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time
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 for dinner with family during
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the weekend
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weekend
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weekends
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rose significantly from 27% to 40% between 2020 to 2022.
Thus
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, if
people
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 take
time
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 with family, they
are prefer
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prefer
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 to
taking
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take
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time
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in
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outside, likely quality
time
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 together in
restaurant
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a restaurant
the restaurant
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. On the other
hands
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hand
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, there are several cons for
people
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 eat in outside
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home
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the home
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.
First,
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people
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unkown
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know
 of the quality of
food
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, which the
nutrision
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nutrition
 and
vitamin
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vitamins
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.
Moreover
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,
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the base
a base
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base
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based
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from
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on
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a healty
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healty
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healthy
 person, they will protect
about
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apply
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the quality of the
food
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. The
second,
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its
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is
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 about cost, for buying and
order
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ordering
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food
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,
people
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shoud
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should
 spend extra money and
time
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.
Moreover
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,
people
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 who work in
private
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a private
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 company, they prefer
for
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to
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 buy
food
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 online because
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dont
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don't
 have much
time
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.
For example
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, the
precentage
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percentage
 of
people
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 buying
food
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 in
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the tradisional
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tradisional
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traditional
 market went down sharply
during
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from
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 2021 until 2022 because
of
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apply
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they
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dont
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didn't
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 have
time
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.
Hence
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, there some
negatifs
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negative
negatives
impact
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impacts
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 of
people
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eat in
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eating
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 outside
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home
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the home
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. In conclusion, there are
negatifs
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negatives
negative
 and positive
impact
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impacts
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 of
person's
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people
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 who eat
in
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apply
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outside
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the outside
an outside
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home
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the home
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 rather
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then
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than
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home
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 mode
food
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.
However
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,
people
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 should take care self
for
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to
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 keep
healty
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healthy
 with
homemode
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homemade
food
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, which they
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dont
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do not
 have
time
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 to
preper
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prepare
therefore
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 take
alot
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lot
 of money
for buying
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to buy
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food
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in
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apply
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outside.
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