the bar chart shows the typical weekday for students in three different countries
The bar chart illustrates the standard workday for undergraduates in three a variety of nations
such
as the UK, Japan and Germany.
As an overall
trend, students
in Japan are more hardworking than others. Moreover
, the typical weekday of students
in the United Kingdom and Germany is almost the same.
To begin
, Japanese undergraduates spent 13 hours per day improving their knowledge more than others. Also
Japanese undergraduates the fewer sleepers in the three countries. The very interesting that Japanese students
spent
only four hours watching films or relaxing.
Wrong verb form
spend
On the other hand
, students
in the United Kingdom spent 7 hours relaxing absolutely the same as German students
. Following that, both of them spent practically the same time sleeping. However
, German schoolchildren spent more time learning new skills than UK students
, 8 and 9 respectively.Submitted by adilkhanovalibekaaa111 on
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