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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
thefts
 number in the UK, Sweden, France and Canada from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
, the number of
thefts
 in the UK was the highest throughout the entire
period
 and demonstrated a fluctuation.
While
thefts
 in Sweden increased over time, France's and Canada's values remained relatively stable through the
period
. The figures for
thefts
 in
the
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Great Britain
was
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were
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 around 17
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1990 and
then
this
 rose gradually to approximately 20
thouands
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thousands
thousand
 over the next three years before falling to just above 15
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1994. Between 1994 and 1997, it returned to its peak level of roughly 20
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1993 before receding to just above 15
thousands
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thousand
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at the end
 of the
period
.
Thefts
 in Canada
was
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were
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 about 8
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1990 and
this
 declined slightly to around 7
thousands
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thousand
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 after a year. It grew year over year to about 12
thousands
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thousand
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 until 1996 and
then
 stayed roughly constant over the next three years before climbing
almost
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to almost
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 15
thousands
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thousand
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 in 1999. The number of
thefts
 in France and Sweden hovered between around 5 and 8
thousands
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thousand
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 throughout the
period
, ending the
period
 at just above 5
thousands
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thousand
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.
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