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The graph shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.

The graph shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996.
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The line chart illustrates the
numbers
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number
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 of
complains
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 caused by 4 sources of
noise
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:
road
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 works, factories, traffic
noise
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 and
household
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households
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. The data is accumulated by Newtown’s Environmental Health authorities, surveyed between 1980 and 1996.
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, there is a similarity in the
number
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 of
complaints
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 made because of domestic and traffic
noise
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. Even though the
number
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 of
complaints
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 made by
road
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 works starts at the highest rank, it ends up with the lowest. Interestingly, there is a fluctuation in the
number
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 of
complaints
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of
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about
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 the
noise
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 from factories. In 1980, the traffic
noise
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 caused 300
complaints
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 reported to the officials, and
this
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 remained unchanged until 1984.
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 it dropped to precisely 200
complains
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 in 1986 and
remain
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remained
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 stable until 1988, it soared up, reaching 600
complaints
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 in 1996.
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, the
number
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 of
complaints
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 of
noise
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 from households started at approximately 500 in 1980, and it stabilized for 4 years. Even though it decreased slightly to 400 between 1986 and 1988, it surged to 1200 in 1996, the
last
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 year of the report.
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,
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road
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the road
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 work complaint
number
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 started at around 650 for
road
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 works, but it continuously dropped to merely 100 in 1996. Its
number
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 of
complaints
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 went
to
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in
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the
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a
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 different direction
of
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from
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 those of households.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, road, number, complaints with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Complaints
  • Environmental Health authorities
  • Noise pollution
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Spikes
  • Fluctuations
  • Time frame
  • Population growth
  • Industrial development
  • Public awareness
  • Implications
  • Addressing the issue
  • Data analysis
  • Year-on-year changes
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