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Increasing the price is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#price #traffic #pollution
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part and parcel of our
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, considering
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life style
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 it is almost impossible to avoid
vehicles
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. Here comes pollution which is directly related to
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vehicles
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the vehicles
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 we use
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life
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. Human beings started easing their
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 by using
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 after the Industrial Revolution happened in
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 world. At that time the kind of transportation was developed based on available and cheapest fuels. In a way, we needed to consider coal, diesel or petrol. The more the cheaper fuel the more it pollutes our environment. Increasing the price may reduce pollution but may push
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economic development to a limit
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, considering some of the rich countries in
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price
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 will not affect anything with the pollution. I do believe,
price
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 could be effective partially but not particularly to our purpose. It is the technology of
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 which will significantly
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 the way we use transportation. More specifically using electric or hybrid technology will have a great impact on our environment.
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introduction conclusion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. These are essential components of a well-structured essay, as they provide the reader with a clear understanding of the topic at hand and the writer's position. The introduction should outline the topic and provide a thesis statement, whereas the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate the writer's opinion.
supported main points
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complete response
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logical structure
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clear comprehensive ideas
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relevant specific examples
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic deterrent
  • traffic congestion
  • air pollution
  • sustainable
  • disproportionately
  • mobility
  • urban planning
  • regressive impact
  • feasibility
  • broader strategy
  • public transportation
  • cycling
  • pedestrian-friendly
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