The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.

The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the total amount of seafood
consumption
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in five different Asian
countries
from 2002 to 2010.
Overall
,
Although
the figure showed that Japan
was
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the highest amount of seafood
consumption
, it experienced a downward trend over the past 8 years.
In contrast
, other
countries
experienced an upward trend, with Myanmar
was
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the most significant change.
To begin
with, in 2002, Japan, which
the
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highest total
consumption
in all years, dwindled gradually from about 65
kg
to 50
kg
between 2002 and 2010.
However
, Myanmar's
consumption
grew drastically from approximately 20
kg
to 50
kg
, which reached the same value as Japan
at the end
of the period given.
On the other hand
, the other three remaining
countries
, which were Cambodia, The Philippines, Vietnam, and China, witnessed a slight increase in three
concecutive
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consecutive
years. In 2002, the value of the remaining
countries
except
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Vietnam
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stood above 20
kg
. By 2010, they had grown gradually and reached the same value, which was below 40
kg
.
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