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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada ans Australia.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada ans Australia.
#news #canada #ans #australia
The two pie charts
illustrates
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 how different
ways
 to
access
 the
news
 in two countries (
Canada
 and
Australia
).
Overall
,we can see that the
ways
 of getting
news
 by watching TV
is
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are
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 the most popular
for
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in
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Canada
,
While
Australia
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Australian
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 people
preferred
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prefer
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 to
access
 the
news
by
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via
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onlines
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online
server
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servers
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.
It is clear that
 the percentage of getting
news
 from TV in
Canada
 is experiencing the highest
with
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at
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 40%, followed by the
ways
 of online
access
with
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at
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 36%.
By contrast
, in
Australia
, the figure
of
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for
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 online is the most option with just over half, is 52%.
Moreover
, watching TV to receive the
news
 is
second
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 choice for Australians with 37%. Regarding the other
ways
 of accessing, it is noticeable that the proportion of getting by print is twice in
Canada
,
caonpared
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compared
 to those of
Australian
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Australia
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, with 14% and 7%, respectively.
Similarly
,
by
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apply
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the radio in
Canada
 is almost triple
with
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at
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 7%, which in
Australia
 is just 2%.
Whereas
, the other
non- specified
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ways
 of
access
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accessing
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 the
news
 in
Canada
is
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are
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 1% higher than
Australia
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in Australia
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,
respectively
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apply
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with 3% and 2%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ways, access, news, canada, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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