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in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people why this might be the case? do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In some countries,
people
 prioritize having their own home
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to
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 renting one. There may be several reasons for
this
 mindset, some of which are going to be discussed here.
First,
people
 might consider owning a
house
 as saving money. They may think paying rent is nonsense when you can save the money you give away monthly and buy a
house
 of your own.
Secondly
, it may be related to the culture of the country.
Due to
 cultural beliefs,
people
 see owning a
house
 as success in every aspect of life. It is considered as the biggest step in financial success.
Then
, maybe moving from one place to another has always been considered as something tiring and
also
 costly because of the probability of your stuff getting damaged in the process of transportation. But I think
this
 mindset provides a negative situation which affects a variety of
people
 in
nonbeneficial
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 way. In my opinion,
people
`s attitude toward
this
 situation may put so much pressure on the young generation who have just started their independence. They might be in
rush
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 to achieve
this
 goal and sacrifice vital things through
this
 path. Another negative result of
this
 belief might be the fact that it prevents most of the young generation from starting a family. Providing enough money to pay the rent is always easier than buying the whole
house
. So, the idea of owning a home might be terrifying for
people
. In conclusion,
people
 may have different
behavior
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 toward different conditions based on different aspects and these beliefs might have a bad effect on the way
people
 live and think.
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