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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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In today’s generation, several people are adopting the trend of living alone which was not the case in the earlier times. And
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 fashion certainly has a plethora of negative effects which will be explained
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 by giving relevant examples. To commence with, after reaching a certain age, the majority of the youth population decides to stay alone, mainly because they don’t want to be instructed or treated like a child anymore.
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, they proceed with the idea of parting ways with their parents.
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,
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 has a negative impact in the long run.
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, if
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 retains to reside with their guardian, they can be advised on matters ranging from choosing an apt course, handling money and tackling difficult situations which
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 has never experienced.
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, despite petty disagreements with siblings and other senior members, sticking
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 family can help improve not only social relationships but
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 enhance
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 well-being. To justify, when
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 moves to a different country for whatever reason, after a prolonged period,
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 realises the importance of bond and
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, desires to see their loved ones, if unable to do so, there’s a high chance of falling into depression. Even the researchers suggest, that staying lonely for a long period can have detrimental effects on
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’s behaviour and at the same time facing physical problems like dementia and high blood pressure.
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, the long-life experience of the parents giving valuable knowledge and guidance to their offspring and the growing bond with other family members proves to be significant and much more beneficial than leading a solitary life.

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Task Achievement
Provide a more balanced view when discussing the topic, as the prompt asks for your opinion on whether it's a positive or negative development. Acknowledge the other side of the argument before stating your conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Establish a clear central theme in each paragraph and use cohesive devices effectively to ensure your argument flows logically throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Remember to include an introduction that paraphrases the question and a conclusion that summarizes your main points. Ensure the introduction leads into your argument and the conclusion effectively closes the discussion.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples to support each main point. The examples you provide should be directly relevant and work to further illustrate your arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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