You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to provide some accurate
information
for your article
in an international travel magazine. I believe my past experiences make me an expert on the location, and I want to emphasize that you can give incorrect information
about Kadıköy
that you mentioned in your article
. Kadıköy
is home to unique mosques and historical places and it is well known as the place where the first mosque was ever built, but given examples in your article
are totally wrong.
You mentioned Kadıköy
as the third selected destination for tourists. However
, this
information
is incorrect according to
government statistics. If you verify your data using the Turkish database, I can provide the exact figures. This
misinformation could lead to various issues, causing many family businesses to lose money. As a result
of the article
, many tourists might think that there is nothing to see in Kadıköy
and may not want to visit.
I strongly suggest writing a new article
to correct this
information
. We are talking about at least 10.000 shops and restaurants.
While
I await your positive feedback, I would be grateful if you could reply to my email at your earliest convenience. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
If you have any questions or thoughts, please do not hesitate to contact me.
Kind regards,
Salih Zeki KöniSubmitted by salihzekikoni on
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Task Achievement
Task achievement: During your correction of the information, provide specific examples of inaccuracies and consider offering detailed correct facts to strengthen your argument.
Task Achievement
Task achievement: It would be more effective if you provided a suggestion for what the magazine should do about the wrong information in a more actionable way.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: There is some logical progression, but the ideas could be arranged in a more orderly manner, ensuring each paragraph has a clear central topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use a wider range of cohesive devices and topic sentences to establish clear links between your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Greetings and closing: The closing is somewhat appropriate but try to use greetings and closing statements that more closely follow conventional letter formats.