The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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the number of secondary school teachers’ salaries in five

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by the year 2009.

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teacher

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Luxembourg

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were the most well-paid,

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in Australia were the lowest-paid.

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in Denmark to earn the maximum

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was much

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school teachers in

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the starting

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was 80,000, higher than the figure for

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in Denmark at 47,000.

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, the starting

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for an inexperienced stood at around 30,000. The average

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per year displayed a similar pattern with

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by far the highest at 112,000 and other

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grouped tightly around 50,000. In

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of maximum salaries,

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the highest at 139,000 though in

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category Korea was second highest at 84,5000, followed by other

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with approximately 45,000 to 65,000.

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teachers

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and Denmark the time

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to earn the top

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took less than 10 years, Meanwhile, in Japan, Korea and

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had to wait longer at 37, 34, and 30 years respectively.

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Topic Vocabulary:

annual salary
gross income
net income
cost of living
purchasing power parity (PPP)
economic indicators
wage disparity
median wage
livable wage
compensation package
inflation rate
educational funding
professional development
currency exchange rates
teacher retention
standard of living
qualifications
experience level
tenure
collective bargaining

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The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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14.With computers and the Internet, people can study and work without going to school or a company. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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