The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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the number of secondary school teachers’ salaries in five

countries

by the year 2009.

Overall

while

teacher

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teachers

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Luxembourg

were the most well-paid,

teacher

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in Australia were the lowest-paid.

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of time it took for a

teacher

in Denmark to earn the maximum

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was much

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faster

than most other

countries

Secoundary

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Secondary

school teachers in

Luxembourg

the starting

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was 80,000, higher than the figure for

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in Denmark at 47,000.

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countries

, the starting

salary

for an inexperienced stood at around 30,000. The average

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per year displayed a similar pattern with

Luxembourg

by far the highest at 112,000 and other

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grouped tightly around 50,000. In

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of maximum salaries,

Luxembourg

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the highest at 139,000 though in

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category Korea was second highest at 84,5000, followed by other

countries

with approximately 45,000 to 65,000.

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and Denmark the time

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to earn the top

salary

took less than 10 years, Meanwhile, in Japan, Korea and

Luxembourg

had to wait longer at 37, 34, and 30 years respectively.

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The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the resons for this? How can people research this?

You had a good meal at a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper to give the feedback: • Where the restaurant located • What you had for the meal • Why do you recommend this restaurant to othe

Task 2: These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by government rather than private companies. To what text do you agree and disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any revelant examples from your own knowledge or experience? write at least 250 words

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.