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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Environmental awareness has increased gradually among the general public. It is considered that environmental issues should be tackled globally,
while
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others
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 suppose that they should be dealt with by
countries
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 individually. On one hand, tackling environmental issues globally is beneficial because
countries
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 can discuss directions and solutions together through meetings or assignments. COP is a great example; it is held by different
countries
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 every year.
Countries
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 can exhibit the work they have done and discuss the new issues in the meeting.
Countries
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 can take the solutions of
others
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 as references.
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, Japan has much experience in preventing natural disasters;
others
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 can ask them for the best deal on it.
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, the opinions of different nations can provide more diversity and assistance to poor nations.
On the other hand
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, dealing with environmental problems in the nation is
also
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 essential. Citizens who live in the nation can figure out suitable solutions. Nations have many differences,
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 as habits, the type of disaster that usually happens, or even finances. The way one country does it is probably not appropriate for
others
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.
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, there are more than six weather radars operating in Taiwan because of the complex terrain and the dense population.
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, the other country doesn’t need that much in
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 a small area
due to
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 the cost of building a weather radar.
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, in my opinion, having a discussion about environmental problems in the nation is
also
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 an important thing. In conclusion, tackling environmental problems nationally or internationally is both important and beneficial. Both of them have respective advantages.

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Introduction
Ensure the introduction clearly presents the topic and indicates that both sides of the argument, as well as your opinion, will be addressed.
Paragraphing
Provide a clear topic sentence at the beginning of each paragraph to establish the main idea you will discuss.
Coherence
Use cohesive devices effectively to connect ideas within and across paragraphs. Repetition of conjunctions like 'Moreover' and 'For instance' should be minimized with the use of synonyms and alternative transitional phrases to enhance readability.
Supporting Detail
Fully develop your ideas and arguments by expanding on them and providing detailed examples to support them. Flesh out the given examples by elucidating how they specifically address the problem or contribute to the solution.
Conclusion
Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay and clearly restates your personal stance on the issue. Avoid introducing new information in the conclusion and make it more reflective of the discussion had in the body paragraphs.
Task Response
Address the task directly and spend sufficient time developing your argument on both sides equally before providing your own opinion. This allows for a balanced discussion, as required by the topic.
Language Use
Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to convey your points effectively. This will demonstrate your language ability and make the essay more engaging and easier to follow.
Accuracy
Review your essay to check for any grammatical errors or typos that may hinder the clarity of your argument. Accurate use of language will ensure your ideas are communicated clearly.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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