The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016.
The table describes information regarding
average
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the average
sales
of restaurant
in 2016 in three different Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
branch
. Change to a plural noun
branches
Overall
, it is clear most favourite menu is food that is
produced from chicken meat.
First
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The first
branch
that
is located in Correct pronoun usage
which
Vancouver
Georgia
Street
did transaction as many as 854 transactions
, whereas
Vancouver
Correct article usage
the Vancouver
Dunsmuir
street
Capitalize word
Street
branch
was runner-up
, and Correct article usage
the runner-up
third
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the third
branch
namely Drake
street
reached Capitalize word
Street
at
390 dealings. Change preposition
apply
However
, Vancouver
Drake
street
was higher than Capitalize word
Street
Vancouver
Dunsmuir
Street
in value of transactions
and attained at
$9,02. If Change preposition
apply
first
Change the article
the first
branch
is compared with others
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other branches
branch
, it will be seen that Vancouver
Georgia
got highest
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the highest
number
.
In Vancouver
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the Vancouver
Georgia
street
Capitalize word
Street
branch
, majority
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the majority
people
tend to Change preposition
of people
ate
their food at restaurants with Change the verb
eat
huge
Correct article usage
a huge
number
namely 405 Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
people
. Meanwhile Dunsmuir
street
Capitalize word
Street
branch
was
Verb problem
had
second
highest Add an article
the second
number
of
Change preposition
in
Eat-in
mode. But Correct article usage
the Eat-in
Vancouver
Drake
Street
did not reach 300 people
in Eat-in transactions
. Additionally
for take-away mode, 449 people
that
purchase Correct pronoun usage
who
meal
at Fix the agreement mistake
meals
Vancouver
Georgia
street
prefer to Capitalize word
Street
brings
their Wrong verb form
bring
meal
at home. It was similar Fix the agreement mistake
meals
with
Change preposition
to
Vancouver
Dunsmuir
street
, calculated about 392 Capitalize word
Street
people
used take-away transactions
. Lastly
, Vancouver
Drake
street
Capitalize word
Street
got
Verb problem
has
lowest
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the lowest
number
of take-away customers.
In conclusion, One hand, Vancouver
Correct article usage
the Vancouver
street
Capitalize word
Street
branch
gives
Verb problem
has
highest
income Correct article usage
the highest
sales
than others. On the
Remove the article
apply
another
hand, Correct quantifier usage
other
Vancouver
Drake
street
Capitalize word
Street
get
Change the verb form
gets
lowest
income Correct article usage
the lowest
sales
, and it potentially needs improvements in strategy
of Add an article
the strategy
a strategy
sales
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, branch, vancouver, georgia, street, transactions, dunsmuir, drake, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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