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The chart shows local government expenses in a country in 2010 and 201t

The chart shows local government expenses in a country in 2010 and 201t
The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of nine different
expenses
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 undertaken by local government in 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, education, pensions and healthcare were the most prominent
expenses
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 undertaken in both years. Evidently, there was minimal change amongst all
expenses
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 over the
five year
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 period. The three largest
expenses
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 in 2010 were education, pensions
nad
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and
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 healthcare with 24%, 21% and 19 % respectively. Education observed a slight fall of 3% in 2015 but still remained
local
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the local
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 government's largest expense. The smallest areas of expenditure accounted for about
one third
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 of the
overall
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 budget in 2010. Defence observed a 3% decrease whilst both welfare and interest in borrowing saw a 5% rise. Transport, culture and leisure and other remained relatively the same over the
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 period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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