Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is discussed by a part of society thinks that,economic
growt
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growth
damages
environment
.Another group of people oppose and consider that
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this topics
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are totally unrelated to each other. I will discuss both sides in
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essay below. Industry is
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one of the most important
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which develops of country's economy. With production,
export
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will increase and unemployment will decrease. And
also
you don't need to import from the other countries. Nowadays,
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big industry
companies
care about sustainability and
environment
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.
Environment
companies
are auditing the factories and give them
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of conformity.
Therefore
,
companies
must care about
environment
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because of their interests. Currently, climate activists are popular and very interesting. They can protest to negative conditions and appeal
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public and press.
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, factory owners or investors must care about
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.
Besides
, most governments support their public about sustainability and
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protection.
Fox
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example; trash bins are
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separated
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of waste. And
also
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beverage
companies
prefer glass
instead
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the other hand,
energy
is the most important requirement for
continous
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continuous
production. Unfortunately,
although
sun
energy
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friendly
energy
, there are
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many sun
energy
investments in countries. Still
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countries are using
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coal
for produces
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energy
, because
of
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it is cheaper than other
energy
options. But coal
energy
causes air and
environment
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pollution. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, each particular ideas have its own agreements and disagreements. My opinion is
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is a heritage which we bring to our kids and
grandchilds
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. So,we must leave
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a clean
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and
healty
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healthy
environment
to the people after us.
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