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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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There have been
people
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 suggesting that all the vehicles that run on the roads
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 as
cars
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 or buses will no longer have human drivers and
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, the vehicles will automated by AI.
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this
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 situation has some drawbacks, the potential of a reduced proportion of traffic
accidents
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 outweighs any potential disadvantages. First of all, with the technological advancements today we have reached, there are lots of machines run by AI. In the
future
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, it is assumed that
cars
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, buses or trucks will be
driverless
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.
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, we ,as humanity, still don’t trust them enough because of a lack of knowledge and we might feel unsafe with
driverless
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cars
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 in the
future
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. Studies show that, when
people
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 ask
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AI
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 they decide, they immediately ask for another human to be sure. And for
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reasons
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, surveys indicate that
people
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 don’t rely on its decision-making mechanism more than their friends since they cannot be sure how they managed it.
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, in the
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,
people
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 may feel frustrated when using
cars
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 run
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 their own. Indeed, they don’t use them at all so the aim of
driverless
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cars
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 would fail.
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, the possibility of reduced traffic
accidents
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, in my opinion, outweighs any potential disadvantage.
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, if you are driving after a sleepless long night, the possibility of an accident is 68% because of lack of attention.There are lots of proofs indicating that machines run by AI, cause fewer errors compared with human beings. They are much more efficient and accurate
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 doing tasks.
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, if the vehicles no longer have human drivers, it means fewer
accidents
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 happening. In conclusion, there are some benefits and drawbacks if we would have
driverless
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cars
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 in the
future
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. I strongly believe that the potential of no
accidents
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 happening outweighs any potential disadvantage.

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task achievement
Your essay briefly addresses the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, which is positive for task response. However, the response seems incomplete as it lacks in-depth analysis and a wider range of specific examples to support the points made. Ensure to thoroughly address the prompt by expanding on these examples and more clearly stating how and why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
The essay does have an identifiable structure but could be improved by more effectively organizing ideas into paragraphs with clear topic sentences. Cohesion can be improved by using a variety of linking words effectively, and ensuring a logical flow of ideas. There are some abrupt transitions, which could be smoother to maintain coherence throughout the essay.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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