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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant
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The chart and table
shows
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 that most of the
tourist
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tourists
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 that came to visit
holiday
resort
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resorts
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 in Australia came from Asia. They prefer to stay at
5-star
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a 5-star
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 hotel and enjoy sightseeing. But, by average day length of stay Asia
tourist
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tourists
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 spend the shortest period of time staying in the
resort
.
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, the least number of
tourist
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tourists
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 that took a trip to Australia came from other regions. They usually
stays
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 for 10 days and they love to surf. Based on
average
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the average
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 length of stay, european
tourist
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tourists
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stays
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 for the longest period in the
holiday
resort
 which is 16 days. European
tourist
 mostly spend their activity by swimming or sunbathing. American
tourist
also
 spend their
holiday
at
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a
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 pretty long time which is 14 days, they tend to stay at 4-star
hotel
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hotels
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 and enjoy sightseeing
the
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apply
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nature. In conclusion,
tourist
 love to spend their
holiday
 in
resort
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a resort
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 for quite
long
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a long
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 time and
having
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have
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 fun with various main
activity
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activities
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. The most popular main activity during
this
holiday
 is sightseeing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourist, holiday, resort with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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