Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where the did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People
have different perspectives about professionals
, some of which involve doctors and engineers, where they should work
. Some individuals think that professionals
should work
in the country
they were trained, while
others think they should be free to work
each
where they Correct pronoun usage
apply
may
wish. Verb problem
apply
This
essay will elaborate on both sides of this
debate before explain
my attitude.
On the one hand, Change the verb form
explaining
every one
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everyone
are
confronted with vast problems in their educational period and they Change the verb form
is
were tolerated
those because of becoming a doctor or an engineer to achieve their requests Wrong verb form
tolerate
such
as better income additionally
more respect. Nevertheless
if they Add a comma
Nevertheless,
cant
get what they want, they will be unsatisfied Correct your spelling
can't
this
can lead to a dramatic decrease performance
in their career, so they tempt to think about Change preposition
in performance
to
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working
work
in other
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another country
other countries
country
.in
Capitalize word
In
this
case people
believe in
they can be free to Correct word choice
that
work
everywhere they want.
On the other hand
, some people
believe that,
Remove the comma
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
professionals
are subsidized by national
government for their expenditure of educational duration, Add an article
the national
a national
thus
they should follow their career in their country
, in
addition
Add a comma
addition,
people
of their country
need them and expect that, they should remain in country
and serve.
In conclusion, in some Add an article
the country
peoples
opinion , if Change noun form
people's
professionals
needs are not met, they can Change noun form
professionals'
professional's
work
in another country
of their choice while
others
perspectives are like Change noun form
others'
other's
this
they should in
their Add a missing verb
be in
country
because they subsidized
by Add a missing verb
are subsidized
government
and Add an article
the government
people
need them. In my attitude it is better, leave
them to Fix the infinitive
to leave
work
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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