The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012.

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012.
The given table illustrates the global electricity generation from six kinds of renewable
sources
,measured in trillion watt hours (
TWh
), from 2009 to 2012.
Overall
, it is evident that all of the given
sources
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sources'
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usage increased throughout the
period
.
While
the most popular field was the hydraulic
sources
, the least popular category was
the
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solar energy during the
period
. In detail, hydraulic
sources
represented
in
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the highest numbers over the
period
, in the
beginning
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3329
TWh
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were genereted
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genereted
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generated
by
jydraulic
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hydraulic
sources
and
this
figure gradually increased
ant
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and
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reached
at
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3663.4
TWh
in 2012. As for solar
sources
,
whereas
this
figure rose more than five times (from 21 to 104.5
TWh
), it had the lowest percentages between 2009 and 2012. The usage of the remaining categories had
also
rose
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, particularly, wind
sources
almost doubled, it
accounnted
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accounted
for 276.4
TWh
in the beginning and reached
at
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534
TWh
in
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the end of the
period
. Turning to the category of
bio-mass
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biomass
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and geothermal
sources
steadily increased.
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