The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.
The diagram illustrates the procedures
of
making fizzy drinks.
Change preposition
for
Overall
, 5 stages are required to provide customers with soft drinks. Starting with Linking Words
water
cleaning and heating evaporation and carbohydrates, followed by mixing, filtering and filling bottles and cans. Use synonyms
Finally
, packaging and transportation procedures happen.
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To begin
with, raw Linking Words
water
is passed through a filter and becomes ready to be poured into the Use synonyms
water
softener process by mixing with chemicals. In the second stage, already soft Use synonyms
water
is poured into electric heater equipment Use synonyms
due to
a huge pump. Afterwards, a cooling pipe transports hot Linking Words
water
into a carbon dioxide machine, which makes Use synonyms
water
with gas. In the next stage, carbohydrate Use synonyms
water
is streamed into a big mixing tank where the machine puts colouring, syrup and flavour in ordinary Use synonyms
water
. Use synonyms
Subsequently
,the filtering and filling process takes place into bottles Linking Words
as well as
into cans which later on were packaged by Linking Words
cube shaped
boxes. Add a hyphen
cube-shaped
Lastly
, in the Linking Words
last
stage, all boxes were transported to supermarkets with the aid of special trucks.Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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