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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.
#maps #show #changes #city #nelson #times
The given maps illustrate the difference
of
Change preposition
in
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 Nelson
city
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City
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 from 2000 to today. By and large, Nelson
city
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City
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experience
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experienced
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 many changes and the most significant is the additional buildings.
Initially
, in 2000, Nelson had much empty land and the city
center
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centre
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 did not have any shop activity but now there are many
bike
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bikes
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 that
have
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has
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 been rented and in the left and right hand of it has been added
new
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a new
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 shop and
new
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a new
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 covered market
while
 just above it has been
build
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building
built
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new
Add an article
a new
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 train station and has been constructed
trainline
Correct your spelling
train line
training
. The green area in 2000
has been
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was
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 allocated to develop a new shopping center
while
 the university has no change, yet
in
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on
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 the right side of it are established hall of residence. In terms of road, it used to
use
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be used
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 for vehicles but now has been used for pedestrians only and
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and bars
has
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have
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 been constructed between the port.
To sum up
, the university
are
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is
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 still in the same place
while
 others witness significant changes.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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